英语口语
此生能遇见你，已然
幸福得一塌糊涂
读一书，
增一智。
努力学习，
便明白真理。
只要不断地汲取知识，
便可以得到许多你想要的东西。
'What Learning Can Bring To Me? '
学习会给我带来什么?
上期话题小作文同学们的投稿很是踊跃，收集了有一千多篇作文，老师们也为大家作了精心点评，最终选出11位同学的小心声进行展示嘉奖，我们一起来欣赏欣赏~
I want to learn English pretty well.Because it can help me to make friends for everywhere.Help me travel all around the world.
我想学好英语，因为学好它能够让我到哪都能交朋友，环游世界。
Mark老师评语：6分。help sb do something，所以文章中应该是help me make friends; 另外，for everywhere 不对，去掉for. 后面 help me travel all around...作为并列短语，不应该单独分开，而应该用并列词and 连起来。正确句式：Because it can help me make friends everywhere and travel all around the world.
海学英语H2
Through leaning English with teachers and other students, I obtain confidence and fun! Also, many lessons we studied, make us knowing more about all kinds of customs, delicious, tourist attraction, figure, common sense of life all around the world! Knowledge change Destiny!
通过跟老师同学们学习英语，我收获了自信和乐趣，也学到了关于海关、美食、旅游景点、数字、生活常识的英语知识，知识改变命运！
Mark老师评语：7.5分。many lessons we studied 做主语，不用逗号隔开。直接和谓语动词make 连在一起即可。第二点 make sb do sth. 所以应该是make us know more about.... 。第三点delicious是形容词，后面应该加名词，delicious food.
海学英语68
when a person is alive,He need study,otherwise,he can not catch up the step of the time.If you keep on study everyday ,you will become knowledgeable,That will help you do your job quickly and better,and you will go through with others smoothly.Study can bring you a better life.
一个人活着，就要学习，不然赶不上时间变化的脚步。每天坚持学习，会使你变得知识渊博，并让你更好、更高效地工作。学习能给你带来更好的生活。
William老师评语：6分。He need：needs；keep on study介词后动词时态搭配能力有待提高；
That will help you do your job quickly and better，the step of the time等语句尚保留明显中式思维痕迹；有部分细节毛病，对于时态、短语搭配尚待熟悉；
海学英语3043
Study is important for me.I am feeling I am a young people when I study.World is too big and we can't go around all places. Though learing we can know everything .I study pertty hard to make a perfect world for me.
学习对我来说很重要。当我学习时能感受到自己是一个年轻人。世界太大，我们不能去完所有地方。通过学习我们可以知道所有。我努力学习为自己创造一个更美好的世界。
Vien老师评语：7分，through 误写成了though ，Learing 应该是Learning，还有pertty 应该是pretty。
海学英语
I'm very glad to Join this team，It helped me to improve my Spoken english。Now，I practise my spoken english every morning，I think it has become a part of my life. Thank every friend and every teacher. Hope you study english more and more hard.
我很开心加入到这个团队，它帮助我提高了我的口语。现在，我坚持每天早晨练习口语，这已经成为我生活的一部分。感谢每位老师，每一位同学，希望大家更努力的学习英语。
Vien老师评语：6分。Hope you study more and more hard.此处有语法错误，hard的比较级是harder,正确写法是Hope you study harder.
海学英语真爱15
I already learned English with teacher Jimmy for half a year. Many people with me study english everyday although we’re not at the same place. I know study can bring me about a good habit, improving my english a lot. Thanks for Haixuekeji.
跟吉米老师学习英语已经有半年了，很多朋友每天跟我一起学习，尽管我们不在同一个地方。我知道学习能让我形成一个好习惯，提高我的英语能力。感谢海学科技。
Vien老师评语：5分。I already learned English with teacher Jimmy for half a year.此处有语法错误，表示表示动作发生在过去，但与现在的情况有联系，以及一些表示不确定的过去时间状语already连用时要用现在完成时态。正确的写法是I have already learned English with teacher Jimmy for half a year. I know study can bring me about a good habit。此处有语法错误，bring sb sth. 所以此处应为 I know study can bring me a good habit. Thanks for Haixuekeji.此处不完整， thanks for表示因...而感谢，正确的写法是 Thanks for Haixuekeji's help.
海学英语真爱76班
Continous study is very important for everybody. It could bring you continous energy for your future work or life. With ongoing learning, you could get more method or motivation. Perhaps it could help you get out of difficulties just beacause one sentence or word in the book.It could make you peaseful and confident no matter in good times or poor times. Just like old sayings, Don't need to build high towers for cozy living. There are houses of gold in books.
不间断的学习对每个人都很重要。它能让你的生活和工作有持续不间断的能量。通过持续地学习，你能学到更多的方法和动力。可能它能帮你解决书本里的一个句子或一个单词带给你的困难，让你不管在好的还是坏的情况下都能开心自信应对。像老话说的，安居不用架高楼，书中自有黄金屋。
William老师评语：6分。for your future work or life可以改为It could bring you continous energy in work or life in the future；
Method相当于way，方法，用复数；
Because后面接句子成分，应改为“because of one sentence”；
no matter in good times or poor times此处语义不明
Don't need to build high towers for cozy living.开头小写；
句子成分可做精简处理，部分表达尚有中式思维成分。
海学英语
I Feel Happy When I'm Learning
Perhaps every student had ever asked himself: why should I study?
well, reasons for this question are quite a lot. And now I just wanna to say mine。
It's simple: I feel happy when I'm learning
Yes, I do enjoy my learning time
Seeing this, you might feel confused and because of this, I will explain it to you
When I'm studying, I feel myself sailing in the sea of knowledge.There're so many mysterious doors which are waiting for me to open and there're so many unknown fields which are waiting for me to explore
学习使我开心。
可能每个学生都问过自己：为什么我要学习？
这个问题的答案有很多，现在我想说说我的答案。
很简单，因为学习使我开心。
我很享受学习的时光。
看到这里，你可能会困惑为什么是这个原因。我会解释给你听。当我在学习的时候，我觉得我在知识的海洋里航行。有太多神秘的门等着我去打开和有许多等着我去探险的领域。
William老师评语：5分。“或许每个学生都有问过自己”：Perhaps every student has had ever asked himself；Quite a lot, I feel myself sailing等表达尚待改善；
句子主旨可以表达得更清晰，有部分中式表达。
海学英语
I was very interested in English, I also learning English when i was 50 years old, learning can bring us knowledge, let me know the world outside, It can enrich myself, when I go abroad can communicate with foreigners, this is a very happy thing.
我对学习英语很感兴趣，我50岁的时候开始学习英语，学习能给我们带来知识，让我了解外面的世界，能充实我自己，当我去国外的时候可以和老外交流，这是一件很开心的事。
William老师评语：6分。I also learning English改为“learn”；let me know the world outside改为“outside world”；when I go abroad can communicate with foreigners存在中式表达思维；
海学英语
I come from Beijing. l am sixty. Learning English is my hobby. I'v been studying here for a few months. I felt well, because the teachers are great. If you ask me, why I study English, because I want to be a volunteer, service community, play the leftovers. My English is not good, so I'm continue to study hard with Jimmy's team.
我来自北京，60岁，学习英语是我的爱好。我来这里学习已经有几个月了。感觉很好，因为我想成为一个志愿者服务社会。我的英语不太好，所以我会坚持跟海学科技学习。
Brand老师评语：7分。I felt well前面用现在完成时态，后面也应该用现在完成时态，保持时态的统一，改成I’ve been feeling great. If you ask me是虚拟语气，应该用过时态，改成：If you asked me why I studied English，that’s because I want to be a volunteer, My English is not good改成 My English is not good enough！最后一个句子so I will continue to study hard with Jimmy's team.
海学英语1888班
Study means to learn knowledge，I think and believe that study is happening all the time, and it is not limited in the regular learning. I believe that if we keep thinking, we are studying. Study brings us valuable things, and the most important thing is critical thinking.A complete person will not follow the crowd, he can figure out the truth and fake. Study also brings us a bigger world. The more we read, the farther distance we can reach. A person is easy to be stuck in the current difficulty, but if he can see the beauty of life, he will adjust himself and be positive to life.
学习就是学习知识。我认为学习无处不在，并不只限于常规的学习。如果我们保持思考，我们就是在学习。学习带给我很多有价值的东西，其中最重要的是批判性思考。一个独立、完整的人是不会随波逐流的，他会明辨是非。学习能让我看到更广阔的世界。我学习得越多，我就能看得越远。人是很容易受困于现状，但如果他能看到生活的美好，他会调整自身并积极地应对。
Brand老师评语：8分。regular learning 改为 traditional 或者是 conventional learning。regular指的是常规的意思。
he can figure out the truth and fake改成 he or she can tell the truth from the wrong, the genuine from the superficial. He 统一改成 he or she，因为第三人称有男他和女她。
海学英语真爱60
When it comes to study, we all may agree that study would benefit us a lot. So we may say that:I enjoy study , I love study even without any reason! ??But have you ever thought what can study excalty bring to us?And why you are always be happy when you study?
当我们说起学习时，我们都知道它能带给我们很多益处。所以或许说我们都是很爱学习的。我甚至是不需要理由的热爱学习。但你有没有想过学习能真正给我们带来什么吗？为什么当我们学到东西而感到快乐？
Well , here~ I'd like to share my perspective:
在此，我将分享我的看法：
First of all, I think study can makes us happy and joyful. Whenever we study we get more knowledge,so we'll be more confident in somehow. At the mean time when we spend more time on study we do not have time to worry about something despression.That's also the faction of study~eliminate sorrow.??
首先，我认为学习能让我们感到幸福快乐。无论何时，只要我们学了，就一定会有收获，我们会变得更加自信。同时，学习使我们没空去想一些烦心事。这可以说是学习排忧了吧？
Secondly, study can enhance one's charm.
其二，学习可以增强一个人的魅力。
In most of case, study will makes you charming than ever before. Cause when we start invert our time to change ourselves especially to improve ourself , we are concious about learning. We will study sth with all our heart.
在大多数情况下，学习让你比从前更加有魅力。因为当我们花时间来完善自我时，我们是在用心的汲取营养。
We 'll be more perseverance, more active , and more postive . That's the magical power of study~so attractive to everyone !
Last, it is also the most crucial advantage which study can bring to us . I always favour that study can give us a postive influence on our mind.That's also illustrate ~ why we need study through our life long. We learned how to think thought study. And also we are clarify about what we don't know due to the shortage what expose in study.
We can not live without thinking, so that means we cannot live without study . Study makes our life fulfilled and rich in mental. we gonna love it and love our life ??forever.
Brand老师评语：8分。So we may say that: I enjoy study里面we 和 I 不统一，人称不统一，we may say that:we all enjoy studying (enjoy doing something) I love study 改成 I love studying; But have you ever thought 里面 thought 后面需要加上一个介词 thought about. But have you ever thought about what study can exactly bring to us? 这个才是正确的语序。At the mean time 应改为：in the mean time
That's also the faction of study~eliminate sorrow.?? 表达有误。
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