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怎么来学习一篇9分范文？如何最大化地利用它？

来自native speaker + IELTS examiner Simon的范文，回复可见全部范文

题目：
More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone?


范文：

Cities are often seen as places of opportunity, but there are also some major drawbacks of living in a large metropolis. In my opinion, governments could do much more to improve city life for the average inhabitant.

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In conclusion, governments could certainly implement a range of measures to enhance the quality of life for all city residents.

(273 words, band 9)

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评析：
本题是一道多问题类型话题，①需要考生解析居住城市所遇见的困难，②以及给出政府所能做出的改善建议。

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被动句+表语从句+非限制定语从句+2句there be句+2句定语从句

large cities —— a large metropolis —— urban areas —— major cities

a better life —— places of opportunity

difficulties —— major drawbacks

do much more —— tackle these problems —— implement a range of measures

improve city life —— enhance the quality of life

everyone —— average inhabitant —— all city residents

rural areas —— a small town or village —— provincial towns —— regions

public transport —— vehicle —— traffic
public transport systems are usually overcrowded —— congestion

注意：同义替换并不代表意思相同，只要类似即可

最后是来自Simon考官的友情提示：
不要在连接词上费太多心思，用first of all替代first绝非文章的亮点所在！


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