不变的是李华，变的是你每次起起伏伏的作文分数。猿辅导二模已经过去一个星期，不管你是因为考分不高而垂头丧气，还是因为成绩进步而欢呼雀跃，积攒经验，重新出发才是对待模拟考的正确方式。
情绪终将散去，留下的只有优秀的笔迹。下面，跟着小猿一起来看看二模英语高分作文究竟长什么样？
先来回顾一下作文题目：
书面表达（满分25分）
假如你是李华，你的美国朋友Jack正在学习汉语，看了电视节目“中国诗词大会”(Chinese Poetry Conference)之后，非常喜欢中国诗词，因而询问你最喜欢的中国诗人及原因。请就此给他回一封电子邮件。要点如下：
1. 你喜欢的诗人；
2. 喜欢他的原因；
3. 欢迎Jack来访。
注意：
1. 词数100左右；
2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3. 开头和结语已为你写好。
分数：23.5 作者：Abigail
It is really to my delight to hear from you again. Undoubtedly, I will answer your questions as specifically as I can, which will hopefully promote your understanding about ancient Chinese poetry.
To begin with, the fact interests me a lot that you are learning Chinese and have kept watching the TV show, Chinese Poetry Conference, which serves as a great fascination to me. Speaking of my favorite poet, I'd like to introduce one of the most influential poets in the Chinese history, Li Bai, to you. Actually, the reason why I think so highly of him is rather simple. I admire him for his genius mastery of words and glorious imagination. What's more, it is his overwhelming expression of his inner feelings that appeals to most of us. Subsequently, he has become immortal, living in all the masterpieces created by his brilliant mind.
All in all, the beauty existing in Chinese poetry is too mysterious to explore it all. The more you learn about it, the more you shall benefit from it. You are free to ask any questions about Chinese literature, and I sincerely invite you to visit China some day!
老师评语：
第一段表达了收到对方来信的喜悦及写信的目的；
第二段由诗词大会引出自己喜爱的诗人李白，并介绍了自己喜欢他的原因；
第三段总结了全文并表示希望对方来中国。
文章亮句：
1. To begin with, the fact interests me a lot that you are learning Chinese and have kept watching the TV show, Chinese Poetry Conference, which serves as a great fascination to me.首先，听闻你在学习中文并收看了中国诗词大会，这让我很感兴趣，这个节目也令我很着迷。
该句话综合运用了同位语从句、同位语和定语从句，从句运用的得心应手也很恰当。
2. What's more, it is his overwhelming expression of his inner feelings that appeals to most of us. 此外，正是他对于内心情感令人无法抗拒的表达吸引了我们绝大多数人。
该句使用了强调句，并娴熟地使用了overwhelming, appeal等高级词汇，让辞藻更丰富。
3. Subsequently, he has become immortal, living in all the masterpieces created by his brilliant mind. 后来，他成为了不朽的人物，活在由他绝妙思想创作而来的伟大诗篇中。
这句写的非常精妙，既说明了李白诗作的精妙，又表达了他思想的伟大和不朽。
4. All in all, the beauty existing in Chinese poetry is too mysterious to explore it all. 总而言之，中国诗歌之美太神秘因而无法一探究竟。
全文结构较为严谨，层次清晰，从句运用得当，高级词汇的使用也十分恰当，如果能适当增加文中衔接词的使用将取得更好的成绩。
分数：23.5 作者：53
I have learnt that you are interested in Chinese poems very much after watching Chinese Poetry Conference. Since you like to know my favorite Chinese poet, I have decided to write this letter to introduce Lin Zexu, who is a famous poet lived in China about 200 years ago.
In my mind, Lin Zexu is a symbol of patriotism in the history of China. During his life, he made lots of efforts to prevent China from being invaded by European countries, which were much stronger than China. Although he set many campaigns to fight against western invaders despite difficulties, he held opinions that China should open to the world and conduct free trade with foreign countries, which was very advanced in Qing Dynasty.
I wish you could visit China in the next summer holiday, and therefore I can travel with you to enjoy the beautiful scenery and ancient cultures of China. I firmly believe that you will love it.
老师评语：
第一段介绍了写信的背景，并简单地介绍了自己即将介绍的诗人；
第二段介绍了林则徐的事迹；
第三段表达了希望对方来华的愿望，并简要地介绍了可能安排的活动，更具吸引力和说服力。
文章亮句：
1. Since you like to know my favorite Chinese poet, I have decided to write this letter to introduce Lin Zexu, who is a famous poet lived in China about 200 years ago. 既然你想要了解我喜欢的诗人，我决定写信介绍一下林则徐，他是一位中国200年前的著名诗人。
该句运用了原因状语从句和定语从句，起到了良好地承上启下的作用。
2. In my mind, Lin Zexu is a symbol of patriotism in the history of China. 在我看来，林则徐在中国历史上是爱国者的代表人物。
该句用了a symbol of patriotism，点明了林则徐的爱国情怀，为整段的中心句。
3. he held opinions that China should open to the world and conduct free trade with foreign countries, which was very advanced in Qing Dynasty. 他认为中国应该对外开放并与外国进行自由贸易，这一点在清朝是十分先进的思想。
该句用了同位语从句，表明了林则徐先进的思想，后面用定语从句进行评述。但后面的which was应该改为which were。
整体上，词汇基础很好，也能较灵活使用高级词汇；句法基础较为扎实。但文章中部应适当加上衔接词，让文章条理更加清晰。
分数：21.5 作者king（英语单科第一名）
Glad to hear from you! With regard to my favorite Chinese poet, I'd like to introduce Du Fu to you.
Du Fu was a distinguished poet of the Tang Dynasty. Gifted in literature, he left us with numerous poems which remained fresh throughout the years. But there are other reasons for my affection towards him.
For one thing, Du Fu was a strong-willed man who kept the enthusiasm for writing despite the hardships he encountered. For another, most of his poems revealed great concerns about his country as well as other people. It always makes me moved to read these poems.
I hope you can come to visit me soon and know more about Chinese poetry.
老师评语：
第一段开门见山地说明了写信的目的；
第二、三段介绍了自己喜欢诗人杜甫的原因，从其诗歌和人格魅力两方面；
最后一段表明了自己希望对方来访的愿望。
文章亮句：
1. Gifted in literature, he left us with numerous poems which remained fresh throughout the years.杜甫在文学方面很有天赋，他给我们留下了大量的诗句，多年过去，这些诗歌仍然鲜活。
该句运用了非谓语动词作状语以及定语从句，结构紧凑。
2. Du Fu was a strong-willed man who kept the enthusiasm for writing despite the hardships he encountered. 杜甫是一个意志坚定的人，尽管他遇到了各种苦难，但仍保持着对写作的热情。
该句运用了定语从句，进一步解释strong-willed（意志坚定），后面使用了让步状语，并用了短的定语从句进行修饰，非常自然。
整篇文章条理清晰，高级词汇运用娴熟，综合运用了从句及非谓语等高级结构。若适当增加一些从句的使用，文章会取得更好的成绩；过渡词和衔接词的使用较好。
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