某位同学上岸了，而且发来了英文版的感谢信，如下！
看了信，先是一阵惊喜，毕竟是考研上岸了。而且，这篇英文感谢信，我基本能看懂，虽然是查了“stomatology”后才知道这个词表示“口腔医学”。
所以，还是先向这位宝宝表示诚挚的祝贺！Congratulations!
但细读了这封信后，我觉得身为ta曾经的考研英语写作老师，我深感羞愧，因为这篇感谢信里有不少的错误（下文红色部分均有语法表述不当之处）。
Dear Mr.Sky， It's exceedingly delighted to recall those days when i was a student of you. Today, I, am writing for the purpose of expressing my appreciation, because i have been accepted in school of stomatology, Sun yat sen university. I, as a student, am much grateful for your devoted work. It was your help that enabled me to acquire adequate knowleage, aroused my enthusiasm for study and help me broaden horizons. Accordingly, I am now share the happy moment with you. Compared with other teacher, you are more patient, and it's you told us that practice makes perfect. Finally, I took a giant leap forward in English. I am quite obliged to you and I deem that it is of great necessity for me to work harder to achieve greater success.
Yours' sincerely,
Kate
修正如下：
1、It's exceedingly delighted to recall those days when i was a student of you.
改为：I am exceedingly delighted to recall those days when I was one of your students.
解析：要么写成I am exceedingly delighted to do sth, 要么写成It is so great to do sth, 因为delighted 表人的心情愉快，主语应该是人。
I was a student of you，这个表达属于Chinglish，建议改为：I was one of your students. 我是您的学生之一。
2、devoted work, 改用hard work 更合适
3、It was your help that enabled me to accumulate ..., arouse ... and help...，其中accumulate, arouse和help 为并列关系，都应该用原形。
4、I am now share ... 这到底是主系表，还是主谓宾？改为：Now, I am so happy to share ...
5、It is you told us that ... 改为 It was you that/who told us ... 强调句式It was ... that/who ...
你们看到了吗？虽然这个同学考上了研究生，但我得给人家道个歉，因为这英文感谢信明显就是跟着我学的，学生本事没学得到家，老师也得承担责任。
写到这里，其实有多少有点凡尔赛的感觉，毕竟能用英文把感谢信顺利写下来，且只有少数不影响理解的错误，已经算很不错了。
事实上，很多所谓写作名师的辅导课也只是老师在讲，学生在听，老师能把范文讲的很精彩，那叫美文赏析，但不叫写作辅导，因为学生没有动笔写的写作课就不能称之为写作辅导课。
所以，虽然这位同学的感谢信并不完美，甚至让我有点蒙羞，但这依然是一封相对成功的小作文！
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