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虽然题目中的陈述是between 1850 and 2000,但是并不是线性概念,所以考核的是比较概念。
题目考核两个比较概念:1)年份之间的比较,即“同项不同时”;2)age group之间的比较,“同时不同项”。
The four groups of bars are the illustrations of the percentage of UK people living a solitary life in the four years of 1850, 1900, 1950, and 2000, and they are divided into five groups. ←不把题目中三个堆叠的介词短语重复,而是拆开。
总结行文结构:从宏观到微观
Among the five age groups, two – the 26-40 group and the 55-65 group – ←故意设计成同位语的形式来丰富语法现象 stood out, 不要急着把句子停下来,后接(原因)状语从句,设计复合句: since the maximum (45 percent) and the minimum (approx. 3 percent) were in the two groups. It is also notable that the 26-40 group were more likely to live independently in the four years than the other groups. ←不要机械描述数据,而是陈述数据所体现出来的事实 The opposite was the case ←依托前文建立出来的语境来简化写作内容 with the 55-65 group except in the year of 2000.
一定要敢于“舍”,笼统描述没有特点的数值
The other three groups – the youngest group, the oldest group and the 41-55 group – did not have stark features. The four years witnessed a gradual growth in the percentage of people living alone in the youngest group and a slow downtrend in the 41-55 group. In addition, the oldest group's mere 5 percent in the year of 1850 was also noteworthy.
敢于笼统描述图表的总特征
Overall, in each of the four years, the likelihood of living alone varied from one age group to another, ←对应age group之间的比较,“同时不同项” and the more recent two years differ markedly from the two distant early years. ←对应年份之间的比较,即“同项不同时”
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